by RAFABENITEZ » Sun Nov 20, 2005 6:18 pm
Reading Coursework Commentary
My piece was intended to inform people of my thoughts and emotions on Liverpool FC’s dramatic capture of their fifth European Cup. IT also gives a vivid description of the events of hat spring month. The piece would feature in a football fanzine, aimed at hardcore fans of Liverpool with a wealth of football knowledge. Age-wise, this piece I aimed at people from around eighteen to fifty year olds, although it doesn’t isolate other ages.
Although aimed at ‘my fellow kopites’, a phrase included in the piece, I have built it up into more an open account. This is shown in instances such as line 2-3 whereby I wrote “which had been one of severe discomfort, for me and my fellow kopites.” I have also used political connotations throughout my piece. Words such as “comrades, “fellow” helped the piece seem more political. Other words used to help enhance this were “banners”, “red”,” campaign”. I used this political feel because I wanted to emphasise that football is more than a game, that we were bound together by faith.
The events of the piece took place in the same month of the British elections, and also, in the semi final, the two teams (Liverpool and Chelsea) notoriously play in red and blue kits – this is again linked to the election race. On both occasions, the Reds won!
I have also used several styles or influences in my work. For example after reading Tom Brown’s school days I used the following sentence “But in order for you to understand, or attempt to understand” This phrase is engaging as it specifically talks to the reader. The phrase is also a lot more aggressive than I could have chosen, as it questions whether the reader will actually be able to grasp the emotion. It may also be a jibe at other clubs who have not experienced such heights, namely all clubs.
Throughout the text I have attempted to use more sophisticated words than I could have. I did this because I wanted to make the reader excited, maintain their attention whilst providing a compelling read. Examples of my use of more sophisticated words are things like trepidation – fear, momentous – important, and rapturous – delighted. The last of these three examples, rapturous roar is an example of another of my styles in the piece – poetry. I have sounded almost poetic about the technicalities of the game. For example I have used the term oxymoron to describe a simple sounding situation about not being at the match, yet glad the team had made it this far. The reason I did this was because I wanted to give an imposing effect of the game.
wat dya think? commentary on my isnatbul c'wk
